This is me…dying

i am soaked in bubbled water

dripping down the pipe lane drill

you called me your haunted daughter

running down the mourning hill

 

i sat still upon your parture

soaked am i in bubbled water

scattered ashes on my scalp

spooning out the greyish pulp

 

kissed by the curious hatter

dancing fireflys spiked with laces

soaked am in bubbled water

placed to sip a cup of faces

 

slowly walking down the shore

i embrace the taunting lore

breaching waves around my crater

i am soaked in bubbled water

 

copyright (C) 2012 by franziska dirnberger

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21 thoughts on “This is me…dying

  1. This is unique and really quite beautiful. Is it from a bug’s point of view? Or is it a dream sequence? It could be anything – it has a remarkable ambiguity but at the same time a kind of elegiac elegance. True to form. Quite satisfying as a quatern!

  2. it is an enchanting verse….i really love hte imagery around the ritual after…scattered ashes on my scalp
    spooning out the greyish pulp

    kissed by the curious hatter
    dancing fireflys spiked with laces …some really cool imagery around it and cool too that you end up at the beach as well…a place i often find release…

    1. thanks Susan, for me there are many shades of dying, but what i observed is that there is a moment when all of the pain, or anxiety, the dragging past, vanish for something beautiful, peaceful.

  3. For some reason this didn’t make death gorgeous to me…the experience I’m sure will be unique but I’m not wanting to think about spooning out the greyish pulp…your craftsmanship is perfect, though 😉

    1. in the beginning i wasnt aiming for gorgeous, but i think the way how the words are arranged makes it seem like
      the poem is aiming for gorgeous. Thanks for your nice comment, hope to see you around.
      franza

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